假定你是李华，你校来自爱尔兰的外教Peter因病回国休假。请给他写一封电子邮件，内容包括:1.询问近况；2.分...

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假定你是李华，你校来自爱尔兰的外教Peter因病回国休假。请给他写一封电子邮件，内容包括:1. 询问近况；2. 分享班级最新消息；3. 表达祝愿。

注意:1. 词数80左右；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

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【回答】

Dear Peter,

I am sorry to hear that you have gone back home on sick leave. How are you feeling now?

I hope my good news for you will sweep away the shadow of disease. Last month, an English festival was held in our school, and our class performed a song which you taught us at the festival. As soon as we finished the song, all the audience gave us warm applause. If only you had been there.

We all miss you very much and wish you a quick and complete recovery.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

【分析】

本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求考生写一封邮件，向因病假回国休假的外教老师询问近况，分享消息和表达祝愿。

【详解】第一步：审题

体裁：应用文

时态：根据提示，时态应为一般过去时和一般现在时。

结构：三段式结构。第一段询问近况；第二段告知班级消息；第三段表达祝愿。

要求：1.询问近况（How are you feeling now?）

     2.告知班级消息（my good news; performed a song which you taught us）

     3.表达祝愿（wish you a quick and complete recovery）

第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）

be sorry to do; on sick leave; sweep away; as soon as; give sb. warm applause; recovery

第三步：连词成句

1. I am sorry to hear that you have gone back home on sick leave.

2. I hope my good news for you will sweep away the shadow of disease.

3. As soon as we finished the song, all the audience gave us warm applause.

4. We all miss you very much and wish you a quick and complete recovery.

根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，

第五步：润*修改

【点睛】范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。

1.作者范文中使用了主从复合句，如：

I am sorry to hear that you have gone back home on sick leave.( 听说你请病假回家了，我很难过。)这句话运用了that 引导宾语从句。

Last month, an English festival was held in our school, and our class performed a song which you taught us at the festival.(上个月，我们学校举办了英语节，我们班在节上表演了一首您教我们的歌曲。)这句话运用了which引导限制*定语从句。

As soon as we finished the song, all the audience gave us warm applause.(我们一唱完这首歌，所有的观众都给了我们热烈的掌声。)这句话中as soon as引导时间状语从句。

2.使用了一些固定词组，如be sorry to do; on sick leave; sweep away; as soon as; give sb. warm applause等。

全文中没有*式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增*添*。

知识点：提纲作文

题型：书面表达